The photographer is looking for thoughtful feedback on the image as a whole, especially around the areas noted below.
Feedback Focus: Artistic / Expressive
About This Image
We were on Chinitna Bay in Lake Clark National Park. It was a foggy morning when we saw this brown bear and a couple seagull friends out on the tide flats. I really liked the feel of the fog and the horizon seemingly disappearing into infinity.
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I would love any thoughts or advice on how to make the composition better. Was I able to communicate that foggy infinite feel?
Well, I would have to say I’d feel safer photographing kangaroos than a bear!
At first glance, I thought the gull behnd the bear was problematic, but the more I looked the better I liked it. Love those pink feet. I think the birds add to the story.
I like David’s crop, but would consider leaving a bit more room on the bottom and the left side. I also played with a darker Linear Gradient from the bottom and a light one from the top…with a hint of blue. Not sure if that worked or not. Regardless, you have done a fine job of communicating the foggy feel.
Repost looks good and @Glenys_Passier suggested edits might be worth investigated. A nice photo and gulls are always around when food scraps are available. I wonder what bringing up the shadows on the bear would do especially for making the eyes more apparent. Just a thought! I like the horizontal lines in the BG and the fogginess of th top of the frame. Well done…Jim
I like the foggy feel, Timothy, and the repost is a significant improvement. I’m not sure about the dark foreground, but I really like the gradient that @Glenys_Passier used on the top as a means of merging the water seamlessly with the sky. Not having a clue what the slope of the beach was, I’d suggest a lower point of view if it were possible, though I suspect it wasn’t.
Thank you Dennis. I will definitely try the gradients that you and Glenys suggested. I would have loved a lower POV but unfortunately I had to take what I could get.
I can’t offer any constructive criticism, but I do think the photo is fantastic! It bothers me slightly the the bear’s head blocks the gulls wing, but nothing you can do about that. Great image!
