# Blackwater Flower 227 + REDO **URL:** \ **Category:** Image Critiques\ **Tags:** plant-life\ **Created:** [June 19, 2024, 8:50pm UTC](https://community.naturephotographers.network/t/blackwater-flower-227-redo/41814 "2024-06-19T20:50:33Z")\ **Posts on this page:** 9\ **Page:** 1
**Author:** ![Steve\_Rosendahl](https://assets.naturephotographers.network/user_avatar/community.naturephotographers.network/steve_rosendahl/32/50658_2.png) [@Steve\_Rosendahl](https://community.naturephotographers.network/u/Steve_Rosendahl)\ **Post date:** [June 19, 2024, 8:50pm UTC](https://community.naturephotographers.network/t/blackwater-flower-227-redo/41814/1 "2024-06-19T20:50:33Z")
REDO 2 ![BWC2 5F-3](https://images.naturephotographers.network/original/3X/b/d/bdb89dbf5b26ad856b1ed59786921189dc71490a.jpeg) REDO 1 ![BWC2 3](https://images.naturephotographers.network/original/3X/f/9/f9cacca4145878fc265b5df92f15a25d450d1cd1.jpeg) ![BWC2 3.jpg](https://images.naturephotographers.network/original/3X/d/a/da416d7a04e7758519937344c2d38b331c6bd027.jpeg) > **Critique Style Requested:** _Initial Reaction_ > > Please share your immediate response to the image before reading the photographer’s intent (obscured text below) or other comments. The photographer seeks a genuinely unbiased first impression. ### Questions to guide your feedback Going for the beauty and importance of wetlands What story do you see ### Other Information _Please leave your feedback before viewing the blurred information below, once you have replied, click to reveal the text and see if your assessment aligns with the photographer. Remember, this if for their benefit to learn what your unbiased reaction is._ ### Image Description Continuing the Blackwater projects I posted last year. Hoping to do a chapter two on lily pads ### Technical Details ![image](https://images.naturephotographers.network/original/3X/8/4/844b202314330ca9dc37f27f86e6ad063bf30eeb.png) ### Specific Feedback My focus is always on Emotional story * * * ### Critique Template Use of the template is optional, but it can help spark ideas. - Vision and Purpose: - Conceptual: - Emotional Impact and Mood: - Composition: - Balance and Visual Weight: - Depth and Dimension: - Color: - Lighting: - Processing: - Technical: ---
**Author:** ![Dennis\_Plank](https://assets.naturephotographers.network/user_avatar/community.naturephotographers.network/dennis_plank/32/27033_2.png) [@Dennis\_Plank](https://community.naturephotographers.network/u/Dennis_Plank)\ **Post date:** [June 19, 2024, 10:16pm UTC](https://community.naturephotographers.network/t/blackwater-flower-227-redo/41814/2 "2024-06-19T22:16:03Z")
Very beautiful, Steve. I really like your composition and the placement of the bloom. I like the underwater stem as it helps close that side of the image a bit. The white streak and the thin white arc by the lower left petal feel a bit distracting to me and I don’t think they add anything to the image. ---
**Author:** ![Steve\_Rosendahl](https://assets.naturephotographers.network/user_avatar/community.naturephotographers.network/steve_rosendahl/32/50658_2.png) [@Steve\_Rosendahl](https://community.naturephotographers.network/u/Steve_Rosendahl)\ **Post date:** [June 20, 2024, 12:26pm UTC](https://community.naturephotographers.network/t/blackwater-flower-227-redo/41814/3 "2024-06-20T12:26:20Z")
Thanks @Dennis_Plank I must change the lighting near my computer, as the glare hides subtle details. Thanks again for pointing this out as I did not see them. Steve ---
**Author:** ![Dennis\_Plank](https://assets.naturephotographers.network/user_avatar/community.naturephotographers.network/dennis_plank/32/27033_2.png) [@Dennis\_Plank](https://community.naturephotographers.network/u/Dennis_Plank)\ **Post date:** [June 20, 2024, 2:29pm UTC](https://community.naturephotographers.network/t/blackwater-flower-227-redo/41814/4 "2024-06-20T14:29:07Z")
I used black foam board, duct tape and sticky-back velcro to make hoods for my monitors. ---
**Author:** ![Allen\_Brooks](https://assets.naturephotographers.network/user_avatar/community.naturephotographers.network/allen_brooks/32/390_2.png) [@Allen\_Brooks](https://community.naturephotographers.network/u/Allen_Brooks)\ **Post date:** [June 21, 2024, 2:49pm UTC](https://community.naturephotographers.network/t/blackwater-flower-227-redo/41814/5 "2024-06-21T14:49:13Z")
Nice job on the repost. I like how the flower pops against the black background. I’d be tempted to remove the petal on the left; the other two act like leading lines to the flower. ---
**Author:** ![Steve\_Rosendahl](https://assets.naturephotographers.network/user_avatar/community.naturephotographers.network/steve_rosendahl/32/50658_2.png) [@Steve\_Rosendahl](https://community.naturephotographers.network/u/Steve_Rosendahl)\ **Post date:** [June 22, 2024, 12:24pm UTC](https://community.naturephotographers.network/t/blackwater-flower-227-redo/41814/6 "2024-06-22T12:24:34Z")
Thanks @Dennis_Plank and @Allen_Brooks I did a test print and ended up cloning out the root as in print; it was distracting. But I agree on the screen it was a positive. ---
**Author:** ![Dennis\_Plank](https://assets.naturephotographers.network/user_avatar/community.naturephotographers.network/dennis_plank/32/27033_2.png) [@Dennis\_Plank](https://community.naturephotographers.network/u/Dennis_Plank)\ **Post date:** [June 22, 2024, 3:19pm UTC](https://community.naturephotographers.network/t/blackwater-flower-227-redo/41814/7 "2024-06-22T15:19:14Z")
Interesting difference there. I can see that happening though. ---
**Author:** ![Bonnie\_Lampley](https://assets.naturephotographers.network/user_avatar/community.naturephotographers.network/bonnie_lampley/32/4825_2.png) [@Bonnie\_Lampley](https://community.naturephotographers.network/u/Bonnie_Lampley)\ **Post date:** [June 23, 2024, 5:34pm UTC](https://community.naturephotographers.network/t/blackwater-flower-227-redo/41814/8 "2024-06-23T17:34:27Z")
Striking photo, Steve. For me, the redo is working better, except for the flower itself. The flower in the redo looks muddy (at least on screen, maybe the print is different). The flower in the original is really bright, but it doesn’t look blown on my screen. Story-wise, I get the feeling that the little flower is setting off on its own for the first time. Leaving the nest, as it were. ---
**Author:** ![Bill\_Fach](https://assets.naturephotographers.network/user_avatar/community.naturephotographers.network/bill_fach/32/78290_2.png) [@Bill\_Fach](https://community.naturephotographers.network/u/Bill_Fach)\ **Post date:** [June 24, 2024, 1:11pm UTC](https://community.naturephotographers.network/t/blackwater-flower-227-redo/41814/9 "2024-06-24T13:11:31Z")
Steve: I like the subject and comp a lot. One thing that I find curious is that in the redo the flower is darker but the pads are lighter. Not sure how that happened but if I could have the flower in the original and the pads in the repost it would work better for me. Still a marvelous find and a fine image. \>=))\>