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Self Critique
I think I should have stopped down to get more of the thistle in perfect focus
Creative direction
I’ve always been drawn to the geometry hidden in nature. There’s something deeply satisfying about pulling a single detail out of visual chaos and letting a simple composition emerge from it.
For me, this image is really about persistence and architecture caught in the act of falling apart. Two builders share the frame. The plant spent a season assembling itself thorn by thorn, and now stands as the skeleton of its own ambition. The spider’s web is newer, more delicate, woven onto the remains of that earlier work. Both are temporary structures. Both are catching the same last light of the day. That quiet conversation between them is what I want the picture to be about.
The mood I’m reaching for sits closer to still-life painting than to nature photography, something in the spirit of Dutch vanitas, where beauty and impermanence are the same thing. The image gestures in that direction but doesn’t fully commit. I’d like to push further into stillness and intimacy, into the feeling that the viewer has wandered into something private and fleeting.
Specific Feedback
I am mainly interested on what you feel looking at that kind of image, are you bored, fascinated or something in between.
Technical Details
OM-1 - Olympus 300mm f4
f5 - 1/640s - iso 200
-1.3 EV
Description
I was out photographing birds about an hour after dawn in September, with the sun at my back. When I turned around, I caught sight of this thistle, backlit and glowing in the low morning light. I had to take the shot. Honestly, I took several, working the angles and trying to find a viewpoint that would declutter the background.
Hello Sebastian! Very nice seeing. I love the variety of detail in this image. The back lighting is lovely. With that said, my eye wanted to see how it would work if flipped horizontally. The reason: The branches seem to dominate when in your original image, taking away emphasis on the curling leaves (? — it feels unbalanced to me). The flipped image is attached. To my eye, it seems to flow a little better.
To answer your specific question, I am fascinated by the image, the combination of the elements (spider web, thorny branches, leaves) are well seen and keep my eye moving through the image, exploring the features. PS Very nice writing, also!
Sebastian: Welcome to NPN and thanks for an exceptionally fine first post. Really well seen, composed and captured. I think the flip works better because of our western bent toward reading left to right which is the learned natural flow for our eyes. It’s a subconscious thing but nonetheless real. As for your DOF choice I think it works just fine as the sharpness of the web carries the day even though not all of it is perfectly sharp. Getting the plane of focus right is critical on these kind of shots and I think you nailed it. Overall a very pleasing and compelling image. Great to have you aboard and appreciative of the critiques you’ve already provided on other’s work. >=))>
Thanks for the image, Sebastien. I like the color palate and flow of the image, and I agree that the unfocused areas are a little distracting. The light is beautiful. I appriciate your vision of a quiet conversation between these delecate, tempral entities; so nicely said. My first reaction to the image is not quiet. My eyes move from one lovely, beautifully lit element (cluster mid-right, spider web top left, row of thorns center) to another, but doesn’t know where to land. Maybe a smaller piece of this small scene?
Thanks so much for the warm welcome, Bill, and for taking the time on the critique. The point about western reading flow isn’t something I’d consciously thought about, but it seems obvious now that you’ve pointed it out. I’ll start sitting with the flipped version on more frames before I commit. Good to know the focus plane held up too. That’s always something I try to nail on close-up shots. Looking forward to spending more time around here.
Thanks for taking the time with this. It’s a fair and honest reading. I was drawn to the layered quality of the scene, the way each element carried its own touch of light, but I can see how the eye starts to drift rather than settle. A tighter crop is certainly worth exploring. I may go back to the file and see whether any single element can hold the frame on its own. I confess I’m often reluctant to crop, since my sensor doesn’t have many pixels to spare.
I just now found time to check this one out and I absolutely love it!! Enough is in focus and the spider web is beyond perfect, as is the light and the BG. I think @Susanna_Euston 's flip is a wonderful idea – something I rarely think about!
Hi Sebastien— I really like the color balance of this photograph… I also agree with Susanna’s suggestion to flip the image so it reads right to left. I think the spider’s web is in perfect balance to the rest of the sharp branches.
This is a wonderful photo Sebastien , I’m really drawn by the backlighting.
I too prefer the flipped version. My eye does not get lost in this photo, my eye starts at the bottom and flows up to the thistle and moves comfortably on to the spiders web. I see no reason for a crop, but you are the ultimate decider here.
Good work!!
Alice
Thanks @Alice and @tom.marin for your kind comments. The jury has clearly spoken on the flip, and I find myself in full agreement with the verdict. As Alice rightly pointed out, it lets the web stand out far more clearly, which is really what the image was asking for all along.
