The photographer is looking for thoughtful feedback on the image as a whole, especially around the areas noted below.
Feedback Focus: Artistic / Expressive
About This Image
Luther Burbank’s house and home garden is a small park in town, and the modest greenhouse offers a couple of views through the windows, although there is not much inside. I tried for a triptych here but couldn’t pull it off to my satisfaction, even with a lot of flipping and distorting. So I’ll leave it as a modest set of images.
Processing software: LR and PS
Major adjustments: none – just global LR tweaks and some cropping and slight distortion corrections in PS.
Blending/stacking: none
Other notes: tripod
It is amazing how much material sticks to greenhouse glass which in this case provides a fog-like filter. I like the third one the best. The dark leaves provide a sense of moodiness to the overall image. I would remove the dark object in the light area below the horizontal part of the frame as it caught my eye the most in the third image. The textures of the window frames add some “Andrew Wyeth-like” feature to all the images. Well done…Jim
Diane: These are well seen and composed. I do prefer #1 for the splash of color and the light but the other two are nicely done as well. Top drawer all. >=))>
Diane - these are lovely, and very reminiscent of the work of Fay Godwin - a very famous UK photographer. She did a series “Glassworks” on an abandoned derelict glassworks shooting the flowers through the scattered glass panes - waiting for gorgeous light. If you can get a copy its wonderful book
Got to be the first one of your series for me - because of the colours and light - but I like the background shape of the greenhouse in the second for the narrative.
World of books have a copy of her self published book at the moment.
Diane, I like these. Seen through these windows, the subjects are more interesting than they would be otherwise.
The fact that the frames are not straight doesn’t particularly bother me in the second or third shot. In the first shot, for some reason, it makes me immediately conscious that there’s a photographer involved. I’d consider distort ing that one so the lines are straight, e.g.,
Thanks, @Jim_Zablotny , @Bill_Fach and @Huw_Thomas ! I will check out Fay Godwin for sure. And the two blobs in #2 and #3 have been removed in the master files. I did have my doubts about them. Won’t bother to repost.
And thanks, @Don_Peters – I just saw the additional reply. A good idea – I do that sort of thing often but didn’t think about it here, as it’s not possible to get straight-on to these windows, but nobody but me knows that! I’ll do a v2 but won’t post – time to get with the US Open. Tennis and skiing are my only nod to sporting events.
An interesting series with the contrast between the plants on the inside and the rather neglected look of the outside,
Diane. I like the first image the best and @Don_Peters did a great job on the straightening.
This is a wonderful series Diane! I’m with others that the first image is my favorite, due to the splash of colors - and the light.
The second one I like because you get more than a hint of the greenhouse in it’s entirety; ie. some context. In the third, I almost get the impression that one plant is trying to escape! At least reaching for the window.; or maybe reaching for the light.
I’m torn between the “transformed” versions. I think Don’s version works of course, but I think perhaps because our mind has already seen the lens distortion of the original, the straight version almost doesn’t look natural. If that makes sense.
I don’t think it’s been mentioned, but have you considered a little b&w with sepia toning? Although I don’t think that improves the first image because of the colors, but at least for the second two, a sepia toned version could also provide a sense of nostalgia or taking us back to a time, say around the turn of the 20th century. I dunno, just a thought.
Well seen and captured. Certainly one of those times when only a photographer would see - and take pictures of, something like these. Well done
