The photographer is looking for generalized feedback about the aesthetic and technical qualities of their image.
Description
This photo was taken earlier this year. It started out as a photo of a garden pond with gentle ripples. I cropped in to see the details in the water and found it to be more interesting than the original image.
Specific Feedback
I’m uncertain about the darker ULC and wonder if I should modify it? All general feedback is welcome.
Technical Details
This photo was taken with my iPhone 15 Pro Max.
f 2.8
1/180
ISO 50
Alice, this has me thinking of creatures (fish???) swirling in a white world. Not having it black and white is important. While I wonder about a more symmetric view (white in both upper left and lower right corners), I find my self liking the assymetry better the longer I look.
There were no fish, what you see in black was an aquatic plant. I found the muddy green color unattractive. I do like your suggestion of white in both left and lower right.
This definitely caught my eye, Alice. Seeing the larger frame, I’m guessing you couldn’t crop larger and get a little more white space in the upper left? I can see how that might improve this, but I like it as is. The imbalance adds to the tension.
FWIW, I rotated and flipped and saw some other interesting possibilities. It’s definitely worth playing with this more and/or going back!
ML
Wow, that original looks like a gold mine of abstracts! What you’ve pulled from that is an awesome abstract. And great job going with the high key monochrome. It’s working beautifully.
I would agree about the ULC. My suggestion would be to use the Transform tool, skey, warp, or whatever. Not sure if that is something you’re willing or would want to do. My thought - and this applies primarily to abstracts… is that it’s already abstract? There are no rules! But anyway, by pulling, bending a little from that corner, you can drag out the bulk of the darkness to balance with the rest. Just a thought. But certainly this one is worth having more fun with!
Thank you Marylynne, I haven’t tried rotating it, but I will, that might help with that LUC. You’re right, I had no room to crop it out. It’s one of those photos when you go back to find your crop, I was unable to see quite where I pulled it from.
Alice
Thank you Lon, this little photo is a goldmine for textures etc. My PS skills are not great, but I will try using the transform tool, that could lead to an entirely different image, which would be fun too. Lot’s to play with.
Alice
I wasn’t able to locate it in the bigger image either. I thought maybe it was such a tiny fraction of the original? If this area is near you and you can visit it regularly, it might be fun to isolate in the field too.
ML
Wonderful work Alice! this was definitely a head turner! my only comments are thanks for the inspiration! I wish I could offer more but no notes. Lovely abstract keep up the good work!
Wow! How eye catching. Very creative. I can see rotating it to get the dark area at the bottom. It feels a little unbalanced now. I really like this image.
I’m glad I posted this photo when I did. I updated LR Classic a couple of days ago and I started having glitches, where it wouldn’t save my catalog. I finally had to uninstall LR and reinstall but in the process I lost my edit for this photo. Thankfully I have the original.
What a wonderful shot! And I think the redo is just the right touch. Amazing that you were able to find this and bring it out from the original shot – excellent creativity and technique!!
Sympathies for the misfortune with the upgrade, but what a relief that you were able to recover with minimal loss.
