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Self Critique
Framing the deep forest from the window of this Japanese temple is showing the attempt for human to respect nature and their way of living.
Noise reduction and colors of the shadows area may be too dark, but I wanted to keep the mystery.
Creative direction
I wanted the viewer to feel that nature is enclosed into the frame that human are defining for it while I believe it should be the other way around.
Specific Feedback
What do you think of composition and color grading ?
Technical Details
Exposure: šâââ sec
Aperture: Ć / 7.1
Focal length: 70 mm
Lens: NIKKOR Z 24-70mm f/2.8 S
ISO: 250
Camera: Nikon Z 9
Description
The soft morning light filters through the leaves, painting the landscape in hues of green and gold. This view from within the serene Tenryu-ji Temple offers a perfect composition, blending the architectural elegance of the temple with the vibrant beauty of the autumn foliage.
I think you nailed the framing! I have absolutely no feedback on that. I do wish the walls were just VERY slightly brighter but I donât really mind them like this.
Hi Lauric,
I see this is your first post so welcome to NPN. I like your thought process on the creative direction of this image. We as humans have a tendency to try and control and fit things neatly in a box instead of letting nature be. I think the shadows look very natural as I am seeing enough detail there. My only real suggestion would be to remove; if you are so inclined; those two objects on the floor towards the LRC IMO that cleans up the scene. Very nicely done and I hope to see more of your work and participation.
The concept works very well, and the framing of nature through the temple creates a calm and thoughtful atmosphere. The darker interior helps draw the eye naturally towards the garden beyond.
As a suggestion, I feel the image may benefit from removing some of the small distractions, particularly the object in the centre foreground, the objects on the right, and the person in blue visible through the opening, to create a cleaner and more symmetrical composition.
I also think a slightly wider panoramic crop could work nicely, reducing some of the darker foreground whilst keeping the architectural framing.
The colours are beautiful overall, though a subtle curve adjustment may help bring out some of the softer browns and reds in the foliage so the greens do not dominate quite as much.
Welcome to NPN. I love the contrasts here: very linear temple walls, shoji screens, and mats, and the contained chaos of a japanese garden, chock full of mosses, maples, rocks. Japanese aesthetics tend to celebrate these contrasts, and I think you did a wonderful job of presenting that inside/outside, built/grown, dark/light, human/nature set of binaries and the way one encourages us to seek the other.
Ed mentioned the table leg and sign board (I think) in the lower right, and I noticed too the arm of a woman wearing a blue shirt. I donât know how you feel about such removal, but âif itâs within your practiceâ as my yoga teacher says, then using the AI remove tool in LR would clean that up. Of course, if thatâs not something you do, no worries. This is a lovely image as presented.
Thank you Ed, You are correct these small distraction can be removed to further improve the sense of peacefulness of the picture.
Thanks for the comment.
Thank you Matthew, I could not agree more that the small object do break the centering and symmetrical. It is interesting how I was not bothered much by it until you mentioned it
For the colors, that where I want to improve as I think it is one of my weak point. I will try to play with it to enhance those brown leaves.
I like also the idea of a more panoramic crop I will try this.
Thank you so much for these insite.
I like the way you framed this image, Lauric. I also like the way the inside of the temple is relatively dark which helps simplify it even more than it is. The contrast of the angular structure with the organic shapes of the forest as well as that of the rather monochrome tones of the temple and the vibrant colors of the trees also appeals strongly to me. The only slightly jarring note I find in the composition is that orange and blue something that is behind the left edge of the railing, which just doesnât feel to my eye like it belongs. A very well conceived and executed image.
