Oculus Lines #2

Image Critiques Weekly Challenge
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Critique Style Requested: In-depth

The photographer has shared comprehensive information about their intent and creative vision for this image. Please examine the details and offer feedback on how they can most effectively realize their vision.

Self Critique

I was drawn to the linear relationship of all the lines, the interaction of light and shadow. Would you crop out a little on the left side? Is the contrast adequate?

Creative direction

I wanted to convey the sense of modern day architectural rendering of a major transit center

Specific Feedback

Any critique on the aesthetic and conceptual rendering of the image

Technical Details

Sony RX10 iii, 44mm, ISO 400, f 5.6 @ 1/30th second

Description

At the site of the 9/11 destruction, a new structure, The Oculus, was erected resembling the Phoenix arising from the ashes. The entire structure has a modernistic appearance. It is a haven for abstract photography of the structural components, particularly when rendered in black and white.

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This is outstanding, Paul. It is perfect for a B&W rendition and your work in post has capitalized on light, tone, and texture to make this a compelling read. The repeating elements give this image a certain tension, which I would call, “dynamic invariance”. Some may not, but I really love the little exit sign, which for me juxtaposes practical mundanity with artistic vision. My only nit is that bit of exposed curve centre left - ideally I’d prefer a little more or a little less. But, in all, very nicely seen and executed.

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Paul, this looks great as presented. The rising angles and big curve are very dynamic. Then one can explore all of the smaller details, like the little circles at the joints in the verticals and the hanging light.

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I appreciate your input. Paul