Time

Image Critiques
1

DSCF1848-2
DSCF1848-22000×2500 2.09 MB

(slightly revised version)

Original (below)

DSCF1848.jpeg
DSCF1848.jpeg2000×2500 1.53 MB

Critique Style Requested: Standard

The photographer is looking for generalized feedback about the aesthetic and technical qualities of their image.

Description

An image from a brief outing on Friday, a moment I came across and thought ‘ah-ha!’ on a day I’d expected to find nothing.

Specific Feedback

I’m very curious what others think of this. I could see it being somewhat divisive. …or maybe plain boring!

Technical Details

Fujifilm GFX 50S II
100-200 lens
Polariser
ND filter

Critique Template

Use of the template is optional, but it can help spark ideas.

  • Vision and Purpose:
  • Conceptual:
  • Emotional Impact and Mood:
  • Composition:
  • Balance and Visual Weight:
  • Depth and Dimension:
  • Color:
  • Lighting:
  • Processing:
  • Technical:
2

Dom,

This is really, really cool! Great eye to spot this and recognize the opportunity.

You didn’t mention exactly what this is, but I think somewhat easy to figure out - running water over a static creek bottom with a long enough exposure to produce the streaks. For a natural abstract like this, it doesn’t really matter though… But the result is dynamic.

I like the balance between the static bottom and the short streaks and highlights. This is an image that one could spend some time just exploring; looking for surprising details.

One might say I’m always looking for nitpicks… but really just looking for minor details to improve an image. And with that, there’s a much brighter streak breaching the bottom edge. You might burn that down a little. I think cloning all together might take away from the overall impact.

You mentioned “Time.” Great title! To me, it invokes the concept and something I think about, especially around moving water, about time; that moment of time that passes so quickly simply by watching foam or sticks or leaves, whatever, floating down a creek or river. How long before those little things make it to the ocean? Or get left on a bank… or settle in the bottom of a resevoir. All those things relating to passing and moments of time.

1 Like
3

Thanks Lon - I’m glad you like it :slight_smile: I intentionally didn’t mention what it was, I was curious how obvious that would be - but yes, it’s a small stream, I was initially drawn to the way the logs overlap and a green leaf that was sitting on the surface, but when I realised the water was actually moving quite fast, or at least a lot faster than I initially thought, I realised the opportunity to create the effect you see now. You’re right about that little streak at the bottom, I’ve attached another version where I’ve quietened it down a little - this image lives or dies on those streaks, it’s been a lot of work to get them right… or well, where they are now at least! The title ‘Time’ jumped out at me while I was editing it, I like the static logs with everything moving around them… although it does also make me think of the Enterprise at warp speed :laughing:

Slightly revised version:

DSCF1848-2
DSCF1848-22000×2500 2.09 MB

4

Dom,

Thanks for taking the time to consider the feedback. For me, that subtle change, IMHO, improved the image!

1 Like