Following the comments I recieved, and really appreciated, I have tried to reduce the burning I did on the corner and do some more burning of the water and ice. Please let me know if that works better. I am a bit worried that now the shapes on the right upper corner might be competing with the icicles. What do you think? Thank you so much
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Description
This was taken at seven falls park near colorado springs. It was my first time there and it was fascinating to see the combinations of the amazing frozen shapes and textures and the flowing water. I took quite a few pictures there but I felt this one expresses the best what I saw.
Specific Feedback
Any and all is welcome. I am specifically wondering about my post processing where I burnt the dark sections in order to emphasize the white interesting park but maybe I went too far with it. Is there any other way to made the white section draw the eye more? Maybe dodging them?
Technical Details
Sony a7c tamaron 50-300 iso 200 f/18 1/15 seconds. I chose the f/18 to allow for slower speed without having to use a filter.
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Tamar, your image really has me thinking, there is a lot going on here. What is intriguing to me are the forms of water - free flowing, delicate icicles, and the clumps of ice accumulating under the fall. The upper right is too dark and distracts a bit from the rest of the image in my opion. Otherwise, a really interesting scene!
Thank you. I can’t crop that part without taking some of the nice flowing water. So do you think I went too far with burning it and it would be better if that section was brighter?
Great and fascinating find. I agree with Keith in that I’m really liking the capture of the different forms of water - all in one frame. Of course the free flowing (spraying!) water, then surrounded by icycle’s up top, and different ice below I’m assuming from the accumulation of spray being frozen below theflowing water.
I’d also agree about the darkness in the UR. I’m not sure what was there originally in terms of detail, but I agree it’s not congruent with the rest of the scene. I think you could still have detail there and be darker than the white of the snow, but the contast is a bit heavy, IMHO.
Not sure if you have any of TK’s, Tony Kuypers Luminosity masks, tools or panels, but this would be a perfect candidate for Tony’s Lights Triple Play. One of his older processing inventions that I still use occasionally. It would allow one to increase the brights and increase the perceived details and sharpness. But you could also do well just by masking the lights/whites and increase brightness if that’s what is needed to separate the ice from the darker, non-water/ice portions of the scene.
But for sure, I’d try and mitigate the extreme darkness in that corner. And also, I there’s little room for a crop to work, but maybe just enough to shave off top and right - not too much for fear of taking away from the overhanging chunk of ice.
I too agree with the above; I love the ice/water contrast and the flow of the water through the image.
I can see where you were headed with darkening that corner; it does compete. However, I think that is true for the lower rock as well. My recommendation for both would be to drop the contrast and darken them, but to try to get that to blend in a bit more. Here’s my rough go at it:
Hi @tamar-aharony. This is a lovely little snippet of nature. I do prefer your re-worked image with less burning in the URH corner. It’s more natural looking. I really like the textures in the ice at the left of the frame. Look forward to seeing more of your work.
