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Description
This image is from a recent trip to the Paradise area of Mount Ranier. The park is a great place for photography, but Ranier is so dominant that many of my images of it look similar.
This one was a little different. On our first day there Ranier was invisible, cloaked in fog. But on the morning of the second day, the fog gradually cleared. This image , shows the peak of the mountain just after the fog cleared off of it, but still persisted in lower areas. I like the early morning light showing off the textures of the glaciers, and the fog in the foreground.
As an aside, I processed a different version of this image using Lightroom’s new ability to display true HDR with my Macbook Pro’s great display. The results are spectacular. Its going to be awhile before we can effectively share true HDR images, but once we can I think it will open many new possibilities
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Technical Details
Sony A7riv with a Tamron 70-180 at 70 mm and f/11. Processed in Lightroom using both global and masked exposure, contrast and color adjustments
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Dear Will, thanks for posting this image. The composition seems fairly symmetrical to me — the level foreground, the slopes of the middle ground intersecting at the center, and the symmetrical shape of the mountain in the background. To me, the slight part of the sky visible at the top reinforces the sense of stability. It is a fine photo. If I were to make a suggestion, it would regard the center, where the slopes of the middle ground meet: My eyes are drawn to that intersection, but right behind it there is nothing important going on, just a shadow on the mountain. Hence, I get a bit stuck here. Still, it is a very fine photo.
I’ve not been able to see an image on an HDR screen, and look forward to seeing what all the buzz is about.
You’ve got to love Rainier, it is such a dramatic mountain. I love the morning light, and the way the fog lays in adds nicely.
I don’t know if it was an option to go a little wider, but this does feel a little tight on the crop to me; Rainier is such a dramatic rise from the foreground, and that’s lost a bit here.
Given the time of day, I wonder about moving the light a little warmer?
Will, I think this looks great. I like the color contrast between the blue sky and the greens at the bottom. The fog bank sets that contrast off well. John’s version lets the light on the ridges play a bigger role, but reduces the greens at the bottom and increases the contrast.
Thanks all for the comments. I agree that there are various ways that the composition could be stronger (or at least more dynamic).
I was a little limited in my choice of viewpoints. The environment at Ranier is delicate, so its important not to go off the paths. In most cases, your only chance for a significantly different viewpoint is to move along the path to a different spot. For this photo, the light was changing pretty fast, so I took the shot I could get.
But still, in a way a symmetric ,tight, composition does convey the enormous feeling of bulk and size you get from Ranier.
