Flying Lession

Image Critiques Avian Critiques
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Redo 1

SR24SR V4 P1215388-
SR24SR V4 P1215388-1478×1152 1.87 MB

SR24SR V2 P1215388-denoise-sharpen-color
SR24SR V2 P1215388-denoise-sharpen-color1624×1191 2.1 MB

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I am still working on dialing in white birds.
Storytelling

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Am I getting closer on the whites?

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I’d say the youngster spreading its wings is the star here. The whites look okay to my eye. I’d wish for the third bird not to be hidden.

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The whites are looking pretty good, Steve, and I like the composition. Unlike Allen, I kind of like the hidden youngster. It took me a while looking at this to figure out what was going on with the adult until I spotted the youngster’s beak sticking out.

4

For fun I cloned out 3rd bird
Thanks Guys

5

Good job removing that youngster. I don’t think I would have attempted it.

6

Hi Steve
I would leave the third Egret in. It is always easy to pick out your photographs, they have a sheen that most other bird photographs lack. (what software do you use, or is it the Panasonic camera that produces this look?) Anyway nice work.
Peter

7

Thanks Guys
@peter I use Luminx and DXO
Steve

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@peter
The editing software is Luminar Neo, not Luminx. I do not know where that came from.
I am curious about what you mean by sheen.
Steve

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Hi Steve
Your photographs are more vibrant than I would expect to in nature.
Peter