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Description
I can’t recall anything about this photograph other than I know it was made in La Jolla and it was on 4x5. I could find out more but I was intrigued by how little I remembered about it.
Specific Feedback
What feeling does this composition evoke in you?
I am unsure about the white foggy water at the edge of the rock. Any thoughts on it?
Does B&W suit this? Being that it was made on film, the color had a strong blue/magenta cast that was very hard to remove, so I opted for B&W.
Technical Details
Shen-Hao 4x5, Probably a Nikon 150mm f/4.5 lens, exposure (a mystery) but sure long enough to blur the water. Scanned (probably with a Microtek 1880f - which is long gone) processed in PS.
Critique Template
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Who cares about the provenance – it is lovely!! Odd – I don’t usually think about the feelings an image evokes. They are there, certainly, but at a level above verbalization. But whatever they are, they are mysterious and peaceful and good. I love the ratio devoted to the FG rocks, with the lesser sea and sky. And a wonderful job of keeping the plane of focus on the rocks and horizon. (With my limited experience with T/S lenses I was always surprised how little tilt it took.)
I think the white water in the gap is fine, possibly because it echoes the white in the sky. And the dark in the sky echoes the distant water and the rocks.
There are a couple of small spots in the sky, but hardly noticeable. Very well done!!
@Diane_Miller that is one of the special qualities of a 4x5 that I think I will miss the most, the ability to set the plane of focus almost anywhere in the frame and then setting the aperture to increase the DOF around that plane. In this case the plane was the top of the rocks itself. I have thought about getting a T/S lens for my D850, but not sure it is worth the trouble given that we can focus stack. I do still miss the focus calisthenics though.
Hi Youssef,
I am absolutely loving this! This B&W image is dripping with mood and has an air of mystery to it. I am also very much enjoying the lines and shapes of the rocks as they direct the viewer into the scene. The drama in the sky also adds to the moodiness of this coastal landscape. The conversion to B&W was a great call and has created a wide range of tones for the viewer to savor. No suggestions from me. .
Youseff, I really like this image. I looked at it for awhile before reading your description. And what drew my eye was exactly the bright area of water at the end of the rocks. I think it adds a focal point to the image that really works. It also fits your title. It sort of looks like a gateway to somewhere else.
Youssef, Ed Weston would be proud of you. Your image is very reminiscent of his work. The B&W works wonderfully here.
Another great thing about the view cameras is tilting the camera back to accentuate the shapes in the foreground. It looks like you did that here along with lens tilt to control DOF. Well done!
The rocks guide one to the ocean and sky creating a nice blend of shape and tonal variation. If I had one suggestion, it would be to try to pull a little more detail from the shadows, but that is minor.
I have been reluctant to sell my 4x5 gear. It’s in its pack sitting next to my desk. It just gotten so expensive to shoot 4x5 (the best I could find is $6 per sheet +shipping), not to mention the issues scanning the film. I am torn, frankly.
@Preston_Birdwell , I agree with you about the 4x5. I don’t think I can sell it either. The 4x5 was central to my growth as a photographer. I have one last project that I want to accomplish with the 4x5, I want to photograph the Milky Way in 4x5 color film. Once I get that done I might retire it but I don’t think I’ll sell it. Thank you for your feedback.
Great work, Youssef. It is mysterious and somehow threatening as well. The rocks are suggestive. In a way they also look like mazes and that’s seems to be the point of departure. In a way it’s not surf on rocks but what it is is up to the viewer.
Oh, most excellent, Youssef. The light, “fuzzy” water is wonderful. The way the brightest bit points us towards the incredible rock shapes, and the rock shapes point us to the light water is perfect. I agree with Igor - it feels a bit threatening and mysterious.
Outstanding! B&W is perfectly chosen for this scene as it really showcases the mood, in addition the shapes and tones. I agree with Igor in that the rocks are suggestive, if not evocative. Great job with the tonality between the highlighted tops, and the deep shadows.
The sky is foreboding, threatening indeed giving the entire frame a great sense of mood and mystery.
The foggy gathering of the surf works beautifully in this composition too, I think actually anchoring the scene.
No nits or suggestions, although I agree with Diane, there are a couple of small UFO’s in the sky…
I get the sentiment Youssef. While I greatly miss the entire large format process and experience… I don’t reqret selling all my gear (it’s what funding my transition to digital!) But I get it. I wish it didn’ cost me like $8 every time I pressed the shutter… And now, after retirement… I’m trying to figure out what I’m going to do with a few thousand 4x5 slides… but I’m sorry, I digress from your wonderful image…
