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Description
Yosemite in the Fall. As I was hiking off trail through some fairly thick woodland forest in Yosemite Valley, I came across what I thought looked like trees that were dancing, full of expression. It was the final days of Fall color as most of the leaves were on the forest floor and it was my last day in the park. I hope you enjoy this one.
Specific Feedback
This is not a neat and tidy scene. It is borderline chaotic.
Are there too many distracting elements?
Is the edge patrol ok?
Are the colors about right. My camera had this metered much warmer than how I processed this.
Technical Details
Z8, 24-120mm lens @ 42, f/9, ISO 1000, 1/60th hand held.
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I think th colors look just right with perfect white balance. JMHO. The trees do look like they’re dancing. That’s the first thing I thought before reading your description. No, not too many distracting elements. Regarding edge patrol, there are two tiny places. I wouldn’t even have seen them, but since you brought it up , I inspected, probably too closely. I’m being anally nit picking I know. You’ll probably never see them.
I really like this. It captures the mood of the season.
Fascinating, David, my first thought was that the trees were dancing. The many curved trunks and the warmth of the colors give this a joyful feeling. The colors look right to me.
This is a very nice image, David. The bare trunks and the remaining leaves are a nice contrast. I also like the competing lean of the trees which give this a nice balance. The color looks just fine to me. No nits.
-P
ETA I just thought of an alternate title to go along with the ‘dancing’ theme:
Definitely and interpretive dance here, David. I love the graceful lines, the playful title, and the color treatment.
As for edge patrol, this is one of those scenes where I’m not sure it matters much. For me, an otherwise clean edge with stuff intruding is a bigger distraction and nit worth picking than an edge to edge composition where some elements exit the frame. In this latter case, it gives a sense of the same kind of thing continuing for miles, which is actually kind of nice.
That said, I’ll reply again if I see a ricola wrapper or a friend’s shoe at the edge.
ML
Hi Dave,
Woodland dancers indeed! That was my first thought as well when I opened this up. The trees seem to be so full of life with their graceful dance. You are right; this is not neat and tidy and is chaotic; but it works oh so well as presented. For my own personal tastes I think the fallen carpet of leaves works in harmony with those still remaining on the woodland trees. The colors look just fine to me and I got nothing as far as suggestions for improvement. Beautifully done!
Not chaotic at all. It is elegant and graceful and certainly does give the impression that the trees are dancing. The smaller branches that are flailing out from the center seem to embrace all the trees and bring them in to the center. It is a very cohesive photograph. You did good.
This is a great follow-up, because the sensual trunks are really apparent here too. Your title fits well.
I really don’t have any grumbles for the things you questioned, I think this looks great. I suppose you could knock back some of those brightest spots on the right at/near the top edge, but really this is just fine as is.
, I inspected, probably too closely. I’m being anally nit picking I know. You’ll probably never see them.