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Description
This image was captured in a pond in the late afternoon. The pine stem was impeding the azolla’s path, however there was a breakaway clump of azolla and a blossom. I enjoyed the textures in this image as well as the breakaway metaphor.
The water was very still and in shade.
Specific Feedback
There is an amount of pond slime on the pine stem that i’m unsure if it detracts from the scene.
Would this image work with the top clump removed? The metaphor would change of course.
Technical Details
f7.1; 1/80 sec.; focal length 70 mm; ISO 250
Nikon z 7 24-70 mm lens
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Diny: What a unique image you have here with a whole lot of “what is this?” at play. I like this as shot and think the inclusion of the top bunch is a good choice. My first impression was that this was a drone shot of some tiny islands but I couldn’t figure what the long thing was. Well seen, nicely captured and presented.>=))>
For me, this wouldn’t work with the top clump removed. The whole image is rather surreal, so the greenish hue on the pine stem fits right in. Very nice.
The colors and detail are really great. I agree that the top azola should be kept. Personally I don’t think you need that much space on the left and right sides. That would result in a better distribution. Currently the objects are pretty centered.
Hi Diny,
This is an unusual and intriguing intimate landscape. My first thought was trying to figure out what exactly what was I viewing. I would definitely keep the grouping toward the top as it balances the pine needle and other azolla nicely. The color doesn’t seem quite right to me, but I was not there so take that with a grain of salt. I could see cropping some some both the left and right sides as I don’t think you need it. I hope you do not mind, but here is a rework with what I was thinking. Just my opinion of course. Good eye to notice this.
Well this is fabulous. Excellent arrangement - it’s a saying in the jeweler’s world that elements of three work best overall and I think it applies to other artistic areas as well. I could see cropping slightly as Ed did below, but that’s up to you. To my eye it looks quite cyan though it may have been blue/green IRL. Really an excellent study in form and texture. There’s a tension in the curve of the stem as it holds the other detritus in place that makes the free part seem all the moreso. Excellent.
