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Description
My usual walk at one of the parks. I saw this strong light and had a vision of high contrast and lines. Just something different and maybe personal… Always for fun… Just wanted to share to give a different take on reflection and light.
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Pretty subjective photography for the most part. B&W works in my opinion. Almost abstract in some ways.
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ISO 400 f22 SS 500 edit in photoshop…
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No idea where it should be, but it’s worthy of notice! For my taste, the most interest is in the top ~ 2/3, without the distraction of the brighter area toward the bottom.
You know me. Have a vision and see what happens. I agree on maybe cropping out the grass at the bottom. I may over edit as well. But I saw this black and pure white idea. Some grays.
Hi Gill,
I find this image to be quite striking and I think it works beautifully in the Landscape Forum as well as the Abstract. The diagonals add some visual tension to the scene and I am loving the bold B&W processing. This works quite well as presented, but like @Diane_Miller my favorite part is the upper 2/3 rds as well. Either way you decide to go you have a winner IMO.
Lines often blur as categories overlap, so no need to move it unless you are specifically requesting it.
As presented, I agree about cropping out that bottom right corner. That leaves a really nice diagonal flow.
I appreciate your experimentation! I’d love to compare an image that left more shades of gray though. I suspect I’d like that too (more?), but it’s hard to say without actually seeing.
The new crop works it’s magic. Nicely done. Much better balanced than the original image. I like the black and white treatment and I like your experiment here. It’s a little bit harsh but But it’s high key and low key at the same time purposefully clipping the whites and the blacks. For me it works in an abstract way and might be a better fit in the abstract category but then again we all know what this is so it’s really not abstract. Just the processing of it is unusual. To that I say keep experimenting. I quite like it.
Unusual ?? Great. I got this image right. I had vision when I saw this shot. Just an image that makes you wonder how and why. To experiment and go 180.
The crop works for me! It isolates the most (very) interesting part. Not that an interesting part should always occupy all of the frame, but here the less interesting part competed too much as a distraction rather than as a lead-in.
We all have different inner voices and being influenced too much by other people’s views can diminish our individuality. But on the other hand, it’s very difficult for most of us to judge how our images will strike other people. (It’s like, of course my kids are better than everyone else’s!) Things like the “rules of composition” and all that stuff are based on observations about perception, and it gives us a basis for promoting our individuality in a way that grabs other people and makes them look longer at an image, rather than just glancing, not getting it, and going on.
You have a strong vision and voice, and I think you’re getting it tuned – keep at it! And of course you are always the final judge with any image.
Thanks. I have learned from Cole Thompson and Bill Guerrant. NO RULES !!! I just have fun making my own photography and music. There are so many great photographers and images on the NPN. I can’t keep up. To have vision and try to make it happen. Things that really catch my eye. The techniques the members use just blows me away.
I’m always seeing and hearing things. But I do beat to a different drum.
Alright @Gill_Vanderlip , coming late to the party here, but this image stopped me as I was looking at the latest images. I’m always one for a hard black, so thumbs up from me on that. I won’t add to the crop debate, both have their advantages – again your vison. One tiny nit for me is on the very left frame, the one spot of white hitting the edge of the frame. I like the repetition of the two curves. So, if there isn’t more frame over there, maybe clone out just a little to get some black there. About the same amount of black on the line just above it? Very cool image.
Hi Gill,
this is an impressive piece of subjective landscape photography to my eye. I grew up as a b&w photographer in my youth and I experimented a lot, too.
In my opinion we should not feel obliged to translate every suggestion into action. There is a great variety of reactions to our images. In most cases we were the only person standing in the middle of the scene, pressing the shutter and thereby starting the creation of an image. And I think we should keep the connectedness to this unique moment. This can also tell us a lot about ourselves.
To my eye, the grasses at the bottom act as a step into the scene, allowing me a closeness to your subject as well as to your - supposed - emotions in this particular moment.
Personally I would keep your original version as presented.
Thanks for sharing.
Peter
