Grass Daisies

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Description

I have no idea whether these are native or not, but I see them in lots of lawns. This happened to be at a state park along Hood Canal. I was playing with the “low down” weekly challenge on robins and liked the idea of shooting the clumps of daisies that were all over the lawn as well.

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This is kind of like the old “Cram” technique that was popular a number of years ago in the Flora forum, except I didn’t just shove the camera into a clump and look for a subject. I don’t know if this technique of shooting through foreground vegetation still resonates with anyone or not. I brightened and whitened the petals on the upper part of the in focus daisy to make it more prominent against the two in the upper right-did that work? Too much?

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Sony A1 FE 200-600 + 1.4 TC @ 757 mm, handheld at ground level, f/9, 1/1000, iso 400, manual exposure, manual focus. Processed in LR & PS CC. Cropped to 6607x4608. Taken at 5:57 p.m. on April 22nd.

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Hi Dennis,
I like it. I forgot about this technique (or missed it while shooting abstracts only for a while). It has a really nice, dreamy quality to it. The blur, the submersion, the sense of being face down in a field of daisies: It really works and captures a feeling of euphoria or perhaps altered states. All of it works for me.

I like the focus on a particular daisy, and I also like the way the green grass, blurred out, works like a natural vignette. No nits from me on this one.

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Dennis: A nice cram indeed. I like the comp and the DOF choice. If I was being picky I would like a touch more clarity on the in focus daisy or at least have the center a bit less obscured. Still a delightful image and it’s good to resurrect old techniques. >=))>