What changed: Thanks everyone. I modified the composition on this at the suggestion of @Susanna_Euston and since it felt a bit unbalanced this way I increased the saturation and luminosity of the reddish new oak leaves to provide something to pull the eye to the upper left a bit.
Added after receiving feedback from the community.
The photographer is looking for generalized feedback about the aesthetic and technical qualities of their image.
Description
I had some issues with images taken at Malheur a couple of weeks ago so I went back out this morning to shoot in the yard and make sure it wasn’t a camera or lens issue. I spent some time with our resident pair of Bluebirds and happened to catch the male taking off from the top of a Garry Oak sapling.
Specific Feedback
There’s just a bit of motion blur, mostly in the wings-is that a problem? Also, I debated over the framing of this one. There’s the top of another branch of the oak in the lower right corner that I removed because the crop seemed to call for only a couple of leaves from the cluster. I guess I could have moved the whole cluster a tad closer to the bird if I’d thought of it. Any thoughts on the composition?
Technical Details
Sony A1, FE 200-600 + 1.4 TC @ 832 mm, f/13, 1/2500, iso 6400, monopod. Noise reduction in DxO PureRaw 5, processed in LR & PS CC. Cropped to 5270x3764.
Dennis, what a beautiful bluebird! The way you captured it works for me, with its wings down in flight (I rarely see that). My eye would like to see the bird and branches shifted to the right so the bird isn’t in the center. Just adding canvas to the left and cropping on the right would work (the same amount — it would be easy to do in one step by shifting it all to the right when using the crop tool and then either content aware fill or generative fill).
The soft wing on the left doesn’t bother me, but you might be able to sharpen it up in Topaz Sharpen ai. Or in Photoshop the high pass filter could do a good job.
I’ve had the joy of watching blue bird parents feed their fledgling at our bird feeder for the last few days. The little fellow sits on the bar while one of the parents gets food from the column (Wild Birds cranberry seed with hot pepper, a squirrel deterrent), then feeds it. Really sweet!
Susanna
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Critique Style Requested:Standard
The photographer is looking for generalized feedback about the aesthetic and technical qualities of their image.
Description
I had some issues with images taken at Malheur a couple of weeks ago so I went back out this morning to shoot in the yard and make sure it wasn’t a camera or lens issue. I spent some time with our resident pair of Bluebirds and happened to catch the male taking off from the top of a Garry Oak sapling.
Specific Feedback
There’s just a bit of motion blur, mostly in the wings-is that a problem? Also, I debated over the framing of this one. There’s the top of another branch of the oak in the lower right corner that I removed because the crop seemed to call for only a couple of leaves from the cluster. I guess I could have moved the whole cluster a tad closer to the bird if I’d thought of it. Any thoughts on the composition?
Technical Details
Sony A1, FE 200-600 + 1.4 TC @ 832 mm, f/13, 1/2500, iso 6400, monopod. Noise reduction in DxO PureRaw 5, processed in LR & PS CC. Cropped to 5270x3764.
Great shot, Dennis, getting the bluebird flying at you. Detail is great and I like the slight wing blur. I think the plant adds a lot and I like the high key look. While I could see adding a bit on the left, I think I prefer the original as there’s more room for the bird to fly into.
The original does it for me. Wonderful pose and color and there’s enough room on the right for intended motion. Slight blur in the wings is OK too! Well done…Jim
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