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Description
I left camp early on the South Fork of Bishop Creek in the Sierra as I wanted to get set up before the sun peeked over the ridge. When I arrived at the spot, there was already a herd of folks crowded on the road shoulder. Hmmm? Do I go elsewhere?
Nope. I decided to hike up the hill above the road so that my view would be downward and out, rather than up. Also, I was by myself on my perch. This image was the result.
-P
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I did cut back on the saturation of the reds a bit, so do they look OK?
Any other thoughts you may have will be appreciated.
Technical Details
Tachihara 4x5
Fujinon 180 mm
f32 @ 1 s
81-b warming filter
Velvia 100, ISO 100
PSCC
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Preston: Symphonic indeed and nirvana for a color junkie like me. What a beautiful scene and a superb capture. The reds look good to me. Makes me want to go there. >=))>
This is a beautiful composition. I like the way that the aspen fill the various parts of the image while the open spaces allow for space in the composition, kind of like a rest in music. I’m not familiar with the area, but it looks like you took full advantage of the different perspective.
Preston, to quote Yogi Berra: (this one is a deja vu all over again) for me…
I can see you still standing on the hill behind me. I was lucky as I got off to the left here and got a solid scene without any tree peepers in the view. I think mine was a MF take.
A wonderful take from this location and I thought for sure it was an Astia image as the yellows/greens were always excellent with that film. Maybe the 81b helped there as well…
btw: red saturation looks fine to me…
Hi Preston,
This was well worth the hike up the hill to get rid of the crowds. The aspens look to be in prime color mode and you captured it well. The reds look just fine to me as well. The large version is a real treat with all those amazing LF details. Beautifully done.
Smart move to go up the hill and shoot down, rather than up. All the colors - including the reds - look good to me. I love the composition. I notice that my eye starts at the upper left, follows those rust colored trees down and then moves back up and to the right along the yellow trees before flowing back down toward the bottom where more of the reds are, combining with the yellows and oranges. I don’t know if that was your intent, but it certainly works as my eye never wanders away from the scene. Beautiful!
Using the symphony analogy, I will agree with @Brian_Schrayer’s comments about the composition. I’m really enjoying the pyramidal shape of the middle section. Processing looks good to my eye.
Preston, you’ve got a fine “glow” here in the big triangle of trees climbing the ridge. Definitely a good idea to get the higher view and avoid the crowd. I’m interested in the mix of older and younger trees.
Paul, when I was setting up the jpeg to post here, I had a thought that you were there, but the memory was fuzzy. Your comment confirms that you were indeed there. The shot was taken on October 7, 2006. It’s hard to believe it was 20 years ago! How time flies! It was a banner year for Autumn color in the Sierra.
Lots of rich colors in the image. The only suggestion would be to crop out that white tree trunk on the left margin. I usually don’t pay much attention to small things like that but I know you do. So I bring it up.
