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Another from the hospital. There wasn’t anyone from the group around to act as patient, so I pulled out a lens as a substitute. It wasn’t harmed in the process-promise! For once I’d had the forethought to bring a remote trigger, so it was easy to set up.
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More for fun than anything else. I did consider removing the big pipe in the corner as it feels a bit incongruous-should I have done so?
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Sony A7Rv, Sigma 28-70 f/2.8 @ 30.9 mm, tripod and remote trigger, f/22, iso 3200, 1/8 second. Noise reduction in DxO PureRaw 5, de-keystoning and cropping in LR.
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Dennis: Definitely keep the pipe as it helps to establish the time frame of the setting and is far enough away from the edge that it looks like it belongs. I’m hoping that the deceased wasn’t cremated and if not I would be happy to take it off your hands and try to resurrect it. Nicely conceived and superbly executed. >=))>
I agree with Bill about the pipe. That is one raspy hospital room. I think that your choice of exposure that emphasizes the shadowed regions of the photo perfectly. Well done…Jim
Dennis, another eerie look here. Maybe even some of that “Exorcism” taking place here. Yeah, that gnarly looking pipe probably had you up all night listening to the floors above toilet flushing all night long…
My late grandfather worked in a lot of VA hospitals across the nation in his days. I’m sure he’d be accustom to a vintage place like this one too…
Yeah, Paul. My dad, for a short while, after getting out of the army after WWII, worked in a state mental hospital and a couple of his brothers worked there their entire working lives. I suspect it was much like this, though hopefully in better condition
Yes, my grandfather worked across the nation at VA locations. Long Island NY, North Carolina, Alabama, Los Angeles and lastly San Bernardino Ca. He had some special training and was relocated to train others on the routines & equipment all those many years. He also had helped introduce the “MASH” idea for the Korean War. He was a busy man.
