The photographer is looking for generalized feedback about the aesthetic and technical qualities of their image.
Description
These are the first iPhone photos I’ve posted here. Pardon the image quality if they are lacking. I was walking the dog without my big-girl camera and stumbled upon these ice patterns in puddles on a dirt road. I let the dog off leash for a bit and did my best, albeit, alas, without enabling raw first.
I really liked how the darker shades looked like mountains in the background of an icy window pane or something of that nature. It looked like a landscape and abstract, and so my title is not very original or evocative, more descriptive.
Specific Feedback
I’m curious about several things:
Does this work for you? Is it engaging as an abstract, and does it evoke a distant ridge or butte all the same?
Do you prefer the color or black and white version?
How is the image quality on your monitor?
Any processing suggestions, given the limitations of a iPhone jpeg imported into LR.
Thanks for any feedback you have. I’m trying to remember to take my camera everywhere, but alas, this had melted and changed by the time I went back an hour or so later.
ML
Technical Details
iPhone Jpeg
Processed in iPhone using the tools in Photos.
Imported into LR and not much done there: noise reduction, cloned out a bit of fluffy ice.
Critique Template
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Marylynne, this looks like a frosted window pane. I much prefer the color version with it touch of warmth and extra visual interest of the hilly land, . The largest view may be a tiny bit soft in the detail, but that’s really hard to be sure of given the myriad tiny bubbles in the ice.
Very nice, Marylynne. My first impression, despite the title was sandstone. I like the graphic elements in the image with multiple patterns going in different directions. The darker curved area across the center makes a nice anchor for the rest of the image and the protrusion on the left end of it adds a great teal of interest. I could also view this as a drone shot of a particularly interesting patch of desert.
The B/W and grainy look had me stop to check it out. I could tell it was ice, but liked the sandy look. It was a tough call, because I do like the shapes, lines and textures in the B/W, but I have to go color on this one. Has all of the above, and the warm tomes that really make it look like a abstract storm over a mountain ridge. Very nice seeing. iPhone or not, you saw the image, and got it the best way possible with what you had on hand. A keeper!
Thanks everyone. I think I’m liking the color version better too as time goes on. It feels more like a landscape with the earth tones, the earthy bottom and the lighter top becoming more like a sky, thereby creating the sense of a horizon.
Hy Marylynne,
Great abstraction.
The icy grainlike structures works very well with the muted colors
I like both versions. The bnw version gives me a more classical (intimate) landscape feel. The color version is more abstract to me. Greetings, Ulbe
Missed this somehow. I prefer the colored version much more than the b&w. The only issue I see is the faint yellow streak coming in from the top. I’m pretty sure that can be locally selected and desaturated.
. The largest view may be a tiny bit soft in the detail, but that’s really hard to be sure of given the myriad tiny bubbles in the ice.